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Thursday, 13 June 2019

the best helicopter

hello this is a description of a picture of a helicopter

The best helicopter
Inside the deep black helicopter there's a variety of neon coloured buttons some shaped as circles,some square, some triangle.


The bright neon sun shimmers in the distance and the marshmallow like clouds gently hover through the pastel blue sky as the sky fills with dusty grey fog.


The pilots name is Mr Williams he's the best pilot around and the best teacher around.


As the bright gold sun fades off the helicopter sinks down slowly for landing.

2 comments:

  1. Wow . I loved the descriptive words used and the beautiful imagery created Taylor. Awesome work !!! :)

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  2. Glow, Grow, Connect comment
    I like the way you have described colours and shapes of the helicopter. I like the final sentence to about the sun setting because that lets me know the story is ending. Next time you could add some more description of the pilot's looks, skills and character. I have been in a helicopter a couple of times and found it exhilarating but also scary.

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